Love that was washed away

Just for fun...


From the moment they first met, they got on rather well,

They soon became an item, and deep in love they fell,

Were made for each other, as far as they could tell,

Pretty soon they were hearing the sound of wedding bells.

They set up home together, and things were going well

Until they took a shower, then broken was the spell

As it turned out he used soap, and she used shower gel.

She couldn’t stand the squeaking and he couldn’t stand the smell,

A love match made in heaven plunged straight down into hell,

And for their wedded bliss, it sounded the death knell.

He moved back to his mother’s, the house they had to sell,

She gave him back his soap box, and the wedding ring as well

And all because she couldn’t cope will soap, nor he with gel!


So the moral of this sorry tale of bathroom marriage trouble:

Love that seems eternal can be burst just like a bubble

Learn from this saga worthy of some TV prime-time drama:

Accordant cleanliness must enter every couple’s karma.

When tying yourself to someone in the holy eyes of God

Please ensure you don’t abhor the way they wash their bod.

Saturday funSaturday Rhymers Club

◄ Not one for the guys

Writing in Rhyme ►


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Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:46

Definitely a great theme for one of the relationships in a t.v. soap.

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Sun 16th Sep 2018 22:42

A great one to read Becky; instantly clicks and ticks the boxes. Our sanitary habits at home are a source of mystery to me - it could never descend into an argument or a truce as the only thing that annoys me is those swinging frames in which everything falls out when most needed. I think another poem is coming on already!


Big Sal

Sat 15th Sep 2018 21:18

The juxtaposition is excellent, the humor is spot on, and the entertainment value is about as good as it can get. You made me laugh, so that's one more than anyone else has done today. Another great one for the books Becky. Speaking of which, when can we expect a book from you?!

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Martin Elder

Sat 15th Sep 2018 20:45

very enjoyable this one Becky.
Nice one

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Sat 15th Sep 2018 20:37

Becky this was really fantastic! Clever and entertaining!?

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 15th Sep 2018 16:33

Imaginative fun and consistently entertaining in its use of rhyme.

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Trevor Alexander

Sat 15th Sep 2018 12:29

Wonderful story - above par (pre-marital ablution resolution). (Sorry!) Really enjoyed it, thanks.

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Don Matthews

Sat 15th Sep 2018 10:56

This is so good Becky. Will give you a Rhymer Club gold star for top rhyming ?

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Becky Who

Sat 15th Sep 2018 08:56

Can't believe I missed getting that one in there Brian. Rewrite called for.

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kJ Walker

Sat 15th Sep 2018 08:02

I really enjoyed this tale. It shows how people fall out over the silliest of things. I don't like the way my wife squeezes the toothpaste from the top, then doesn't put the lid on properly, but we don't fall out over it (much).

I liked the rhyming too ?

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Brian Maryon

Sat 15th Sep 2018 07:52

You did well to get both of you in the our shower Mrs Maryon plus soap just about fills it.

Anyway, sorry to hear you didn't gel.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sat 15th Sep 2018 07:43

Really good Becky loved it..?

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