Triptych #1: Coffee, Paper, and Storm

I.
The coffee on the table is as cold
as my hands which shiver
like tree branches during a storm.
I can’t decide
if it’s too bitter or too sweet,
but I will drink it anyway.

II.
I will write about you again,
but I know that’s not entirely true.
I will write about me too.
There will be no crumpled papers
on the floor
because even if this will turn out
as a poorly written poem,
I will not edit my feelings for you.

III.
My heart is pounding
like heavy rain against the rooftop.
There’s a storm in my heart,
and I have named it after you.

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Chris Armstrong

Thu 13th Sep 2018 17:31

Brilliant and clever!
"I will write about you again,
but I know that’s not entirely true."
How perceptive.

Don't ever edit your feelings. Keep writing!

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yajaira

Tue 11th Sep 2018 18:41

Absolutely love this Aly! I almost felt like I was living through it as I was reading it. Very detailed and deep.

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Big Sal

Wed 5th Sep 2018 21:50

Excellent sentiment. Great title too.👍

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 5th Sep 2018 09:45

Hi Aly, Wonderful poem..thank you for sharing..😃

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Wolfgar Miere

Wed 5th Sep 2018 07:55

Hello Aly,

I really like this poem, it has a sense of anticipation, nervousness and trepidation.

It feels like standing on a high board trying to pluck up the courage to take the dive into the water. The uncertainty expressed in the first verse conveys very well how we often feel about relationships.

The naming of the emotional storm is clever, giving it the name of its creator is like labelling it to ensure you do not forget it origins, which is something we often do forget in the midst of emotional turmoil.

This is a poem which to my mind might easily slip under the radar and go unnoticed, but just like a tropical storm when it hits land people will take notice. I hope it finds landfall, it deserves to.

David.

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