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A Quiet Man

A Quiet Man

 

She sat among strangers, discarded pamphlets strewn everywhere.
A face smiling up at her from a photo on a chair.
Handsome and young, she could not leave him abandoned.
Picking them up she clutched them to her chest,
quickly walking away to join up with the rest.

 

As his friend of many years had sat waiting a few days before,
his love, his wife would not answer his call.
Children left unaware that soon he would no longer be there,
as his friend sat waiting outside on a chair.

 

Recalling her sorrow that he had died all alone,
handkerchief to her eyes as she sits on her own.
For this quiet man.. her friend of many years,
she struggled to stifle her sobs and her tears.

 

Few words were uttered and words of mourning muttered.
She had wanted to stand and regale with tales of his life,
but could not, would not usurp his children and wife.


So..little was said of his life on that day,
before the mourners moved slowly away.

 

A room filled with laughter would not be his way,
he would not have requested bright colours to celebrate his life.

 

Just a quiet sobriety, and the tears of his friend, his children and wife.

 

© 2018 Taylor Crowshaw

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lynn hahn

Fri 31st Aug 2018 19:46

So sad. I am left wanting to know more about the story. Who was this friend that wanted to speak out about the man's life. Why is he not with his children and wife.

I love poems that make me think. Poems that make clear pictures in my head. This poem surely did that. I think this would make a good short movie.

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Fri 31st Aug 2018 12:38

your best to date Taylor by far and muchly enjoyed.





Rose ?

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mike booth

Fri 31st Aug 2018 07:24

Beautiful air of melancholy and sensitivity to life here. Makes me think of Bob Dylan - They sat together in the park
As the evening sky grew dark
She looked at him and he felt a spark
Tingle to his bones
'Twas then he felt alone
And wished that he'd gone straight
And watched out for a simple twist of fate.
I love the phrase "quiet sobriety and the tears of his friend, his children and his wife",
Just lovely.
M x

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Martin Elder

Thu 30th Aug 2018 17:20

Somebody who touched more than one other life in his own. This is very often the case without us realising it.
Nice one

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 30th Aug 2018 17:12

A reminder that an unmentioned "other" also has to
endure in such circumstances - gently evocative to allow
us to take on board the human cost that is often only partly
acknowledged, if at all, when death comes to call.

Big Sal

Thu 30th Aug 2018 15:00

I just read this while listening to a melodic song, and I have to say, it's another one of those filled with excellence in each line and one of your best.

I could review the whole piece line by line and still not say everything that needs to be said. .Maybe I'll just wait for it to make its rounds and see what others have to say first.

Expect me back, but until then, very great poem.?

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AVISHEK GHOSH

Thu 30th Aug 2018 12:58

Mystically beautiful. Great one.

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