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basque

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you make me want to buy a basque

to be wasp waisted

I linger by the lingerie

I need to get a negligee

and mules!

pink fluffy slip-on ones

to go with my painted toes!

and seven push-up bras

underwired and lacy

one for every day of the week

and all quite racy!

and perfume

a bucket load of perfume.

so we can drown together

in scent

and lace

and my cleavage!

 

 

 

◄ My Nagual is a Narwhal

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<Deleted User> (6895)

Tue 5th Jan 2010 09:12

a Good,snowy Rossendale morning to you.Mummy Foxgloves.loved the poem,is the 'drowning'offer open to all? yes? wheres my snowshoes! Steaming Stefanxx

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 5th Jan 2010 08:59

Hi Frances - I guess I wanted to give the poem a sort of breathless excitement, hence the "I's" and "ands"! It didn't need to flow poetically so much as pant passionately!

Frances Macaulay Forde

Tue 5th Jan 2010 00:44

Again I love the sentiments of this Ann - the setting, the visuals and the smells. But I do feel it needs one more edit. Perhaps too many "I"s & a couple of "and"s could go...
Good stuff though!

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Rachel McGladdery

Thu 31st Dec 2009 18:49

I love this, what with my own penchant for lingerie and all. Have a lacy frothy pink scented new year.
Love
Rachel
xxx

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Brian Wood

Thu 31st Dec 2009 18:05

Ann-Well written-sounds like the best way to drown to me. Happy new year

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