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The Waiting Room

The Waiting Room

 

For some reason it reminded me of a ticket office

with people queuing, holding papers in clenched fists

Each consulting room had a group waiting outside

There were no windows, a dreary place

The only natural light filtered through frosted glass windows

three large potted palms showed some semblance of natural life

A room of no character, no welcome, few comforts

doors amd lintels painted in a dark dull green

no magazines, newspapers or journals to read

Only large posters on the walls: Stop Smoking

How to clean your teeth, Eat fruit and vegetables

illustrations of decrepit lungs, varicose veins and blistered skin

Despite these warning signs a vending machine

offered sugary drinks, coffee and potato crisps

Officious nurses strode to and fro, serene in their

self importance and adopted air of confidence

Most patients were overweight, some on crutches

Lugubrious faces stared blankly at the floor

Others pensive keeping abreast of their position in the queue

Resigned faces, mostly the elderly, gazed about

anxious glances were exchanged as names were called

Fifty souls there to be healed, cured and receive treatment

all departed with a prescription of hope

No one wanted to be there

they hurried for the door after their turn was over

◄ Inside the Ambulance

Withdrawl ►

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keith jeffries

Sun 17th Jun 2018 19:46

Martin,
Thank you indeed for your comment and words of encouragement. I appreciate you taking time to read my work.
Keith

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Martin Elder

Sun 17th Jun 2018 18:54

This is a wonderful piece of poetry Keith. I really do feel that you are going from strength to strength with your poetry. it is such a pleasure to watch this happen. Keep going my friend.
nice one

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Sun 17th Jun 2018 16:13

Blimey! Thanks Keith...and Don.

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keith jeffries

Sun 17th Jun 2018 15:41

Thank you Colin, Brian and Don,
Your comments are, as always, much appreciated. Brian has become my idol. Humour beyond compare with a unique style. Don, I cannot image Brian being lugubrious. Vivacious and vociferous ...yes.
Keith

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Don Matthews

Sun 17th Jun 2018 14:48

This is good Keith. You have a particularly good way with language which appeals. Especially like the line :
'all departed with a prescription of hope'.

Yes Keith, where were the outdoor mobile-drippers ?

But all is not lost Keith. I came here to learn and now know what lugubrious means - Brian in his down moments.

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Sun 17th Jun 2018 12:28

Keith - you've described my local hospital to a 'T". Only thing you've missed is patients with mobile drips outside smoking.

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