dust lust.....


standing next two you on a mantle piece longing to touch you...


being stuck on a plack glued so tight


trying with all my might...


but its no use...


time passes by...


gathering dust without any lust!

(c)2009 jeff.w

◄ recycling

price of christmas.... ►


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Jeff Dawson

Sat 23rd Jan 2010 23:17

Hi Jeff, just catchin up but said I would comment! Definitely some promising lines here, this poem showing more maturity in your writing.

just be careful with spelling, it detracts from good work - first line 'to' not 'two' and it's spelt 'plaque' mate, hope thats okay cheers Jeff

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Andy N

Wed 23rd Dec 2009 14:01

defo thinking your stuff is changing gears jeff.. keep it up!

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