The Artist [1]

In so few splashed acrylic lines

see Cornish fishing boats

take shape against the quay

the red hull and the yellow

 

See Cornish fishing boats

mirrored in the harbour sea

the red hull and the yellow

with the deep sky sunk below

 

Mirrored in the harbour sea

the jumble of masts and cranes

with the deep sky sunk below

and the distant sea above

 

The jumble of masts and cranes

hints at larger ships and docks

and the distant sea above

suggests voyages past Pendennis Head

 

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1. A Malaysian Pantoun which has a distinctive pattern of repeated lines

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Chris Armstrong

Fri 11th May 2018 15:55

Thanks, Hannah - it was fun being constrained by the form -glad you thought it worked. To me reading the finished poem, I thought the repetition seems to pull you further in with each verse.

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Hannah Collins

Fri 11th May 2018 15:25

Beautiful writing.

Hannah

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