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A Criminal Mind

Sit alone in darkness-

Listen!

Who is that behind the door?

A motor revving just outside-

Be still-

A boot upon the floor.

Clomping, heavy, up the steps,

Metal clinking with each step-

Closer, closer-

Sneak and hide.

Make no noise, you might survive.

A deadbolt’s thump,

A creaking door-

Dead silence in the shadows thrive.

You take a breath- too loud,

He heard you.

Faster, now, the feet approaching-

A darkness halts before your hold.

A knee bends down-

A face appears, smiles slow:

“I see you there”

He whispers, low.

◄ "I"

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Comments

<Deleted User> (18118)

Tue 7th Nov 2017 20:32

The terror in the dark. Brilliant.

Hannah

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 6th Nov 2017 19:00

Really good, with tension maintained and developed well, right to the very end, climaxed with 'a smile' and ' speech' from the invader. I hope it's not a real experience.

It boggles the mind, but I've been considering posting my own work called 'Woman in a Corner' written years ago. Perhaps I still will, and you will be shocked at the similarity.

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