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My High Street

My High Street

 

A disabled seller 

of lottery tickets

Rowdiness from drunks

in a nearby bar

Groups of elderly men

with black coffees and 

endless cigarettes

Obese women strapped

into lycra pants

Graffiti depicting a

crude penis

An overworked

pharmacy with a queue 

of hypochondriacs

Washing drying

on balcony rails

An unceasing flow

of traffic and

pedestrians wandering

aimlessly

All under a canopy

of blue, a cloudless 

sky, the envy of

many

◄ The Young

Juxtaposed ►

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keith jeffries

Sat 4th Nov 2017 13:11

Philip, thank for this comment. As you will probably have gathered the High Street is far removed from England. Keith

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keith jeffries

Sat 4th Nov 2017 13:10

Cynthia, thank you for this interesting critique. You have certainly grasped my intention in writing this poem. Thank you again. Keith

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Philip Stevens

Fri 3rd Nov 2017 23:17

Collective images and contrast

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 3rd Nov 2017 20:03

Much enjoyed. The very last four lines - with a wry twist, a quantum leap that defines the whole as even more 'bleak' and hardly 'enviable'. It's a fine example of the broad form of 'list poem'. I haven't done one in years.

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