Solar thoughts or To our mistress, the sun

Source of heat and fuel for life

Beautiful at the horizon

Painting clouds and sky

We bask and burn in her glory

And she  sits supreme at system centre

Girdled by her planets

Visited by stray comets

Regally burning  

Interior electrons impede her light

Rendering our glowing orb opaque

Not that you can see this

It would burn your eyes out


◄ To walk among ruins

Burning ►


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Fri 2nd Jun 2017 15:38

I love this Kim ? I was intrigued as soon as I read that you were an astronomy lover too. Great last line. Pow.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 26th May 2017 14:47

Ooo yes, I forgot about the birds. We saw some actually bang into trees, confused!! And the silence was...eerie. When the light started to come back again, it was proper goosebump time. Literally - goosebumps. Cows started lowing, birds started singing, dogs began to bark. Intense! Also THE best excuse to drink lager for breakfast ?

There is definitely a poem waiting to be written, eh?

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Kim Whysall-Hammond

Fri 26th May 2017 14:00

Oh dear, now I've got to check the last line before putting up the next poem! ?

We stayed at home and saw a partial eclipse --still great though. All the house martins returned to their nests thinking it was night, and the world went very quiet. I'm sure there's a poem in there somewhere.....

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Laura Taylor

Fri 26th May 2017 12:57

Ooo - TWO poems with killer last lines. I sense a pattern emerging ?

Seriously, do really like this poem. A light touch with verb and noun and adjective, about one of my favourite things to think about. Smashing.

ps - I took my small daughter to the solar eclipse in Cornwall years ago, while my Dad had kittens back home about her going blind by looking at it. My cruel sense of humour was BEGGING me to call him and tell him there was no point taking her to the cinema when we got home, cos she wouldn't be able to see the film ?

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