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unbent

(I came alone and you don't know
it yet, but that's how I'm going)


I'll drop you like a spent fix

because I know

 

there's barely a bridge that exists

which can stand the span

all time and space will inhabit

once we're separated.

 


So you'll never have to question why

 

just close the door behind

me--don't watch-- as I

disappear before you down

the rolling curvature of horizon

 

and remember I told you

 

I travel lightly along

with the setting sun.

 

◄ transfixation

I was captivated by the glint of light in your eyes-- ►

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elPintor

Mon 22nd May 2017 23:49

Hello...

Thanks, Raj..I'm glad you picked up on those final lines--they were the most special to me, too.

And David...it is a goodbye note, that's true. I find that it's a rare occurrence to encounter any interpersonal relationship that can stand the test of distance and time. Personal circumstances can change so rapidly that, mostly, I find it to be more graceful to forego the complication of trying to maintain communication by simply letting go. But, then, I am thankful for the rare exception to this personal rule.

Hey, Keith...thank you, kind sir. I always appreciate you reading.

And, yes, quite right, Stu--almost like moving against the setting of the sun. Very clever how you put that together.

Such kind comments...take good care, all...

Rachel

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XmIqIVxUuKs

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Stu Buck

Sun 21st May 2017 21:31

excellent. as above (below?) i particularly love the send off, wraps the whole piece up beautifully.

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keith jeffries

Sun 21st May 2017 10:09

Señora, Splendid words. Thank you for this. Keith

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Raj Ferds

Sun 21st May 2017 07:35

Unbent and unbowed. Love it.

Best of all are the last two lines:

I travel lightly along
with the setting sun.

Raj

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