mirrored images

Bed (n) - 

A place to rest after a long day, dressed in cotton, a soft grave awaiting its temporary guests. 

A perpetually unmade mess, stained, damp with sweat and semen, a back-alley mattress surrounded by metal bars 


Sun (n) - 

Life giver, radiant, burning cacophony of light and sound, warming the hides of those that dwell below its shining face. 

A dentist lamp, a spiders egg, a bullies fist, a broken lift, a lifeboat drifting across the sea, fading into the distance


Exterior (adj) -  

Related to the outside, hope, friendship, work, achievements, trees, grass, sky, holding hands, breath in, breath out. 

Topless banshees wailing, screaming blood shrieks, poison, car-crash-knife-fight-rapeandabortionasthmaattackpanicattacksweatpouringdownmyback. 


Humanity (n) -  

The quality or condition of being human, the smell of sweat on the one you love, the ability to cry, to be held, to hold. 

A never ceasing snowball of horrendous decisions, unstable forms, carcinogens and processed food, men feeding children feeding cattle feeding hatred feeling numb as the cold air hits my lungs and the cold ground waits for my viscera to spread across the road. 


God (n) - 

The one true being, the creator, the saviour, who must be obeyed and praised, the father of the sky who looks down at his creation and smiles, for he knows his work is done. 

The marrow of a child, aged six, festering inside her bones, the piercing agony, the tears and the smiles, the unasked for innocence, the suffering, the hatred. 


◄ the day of the lord will come like a thief

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Martin Elder

Sun 29th Jan 2017 18:32

love the contrasts here Stu in stark relief to each other. I am interested on why you chose the different headings although as I read it over and over I think it doesn't really matter. It is just a fine piece of poetry and exterior is masterful
Nice one Stu

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 26th Jan 2017 15:51

I know that you favor powerful poetry and I concur with Paul`s use of `contrast` in describing this piece. Which - together with it`s typographical shape keeps the power in a kind of order. (helping to make the force of those sort of `answering` sections stronger as they `argue`against the preceding halves)

I see that the shape of this is more of a containment than
an obstruction, but somehow it reminds me of some lines of a poem:

`Did not obstructions vessel hem it in
Force were not force - would spill itself in vain.
We know the Titan by his champed chain`

(just me driftin`)

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Stu Buck

Tue 24th Jan 2017 13:09

thanks laura. yeah, some new stuff and some rhyme! very odd i must admit.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 24th Jan 2017 11:54

Love the structure of this. You've used some rhyme too, unusual for you. The mirror images also mirror my own anxiety/angst/dread/despair. Urgh.

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Stu Buck

Mon 23rd Jan 2017 23:08

thanks ever so much paul. its especially rewarding when receiving a comment like that on a piece that is so different to those one has written before. really glad you enjoyed it.

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Paul Waring

Mon 23rd Jan 2017 22:56

Stu, this is, well, what can I say, but here goes...inspired, so very original and grounded, with so many rich descriptions of the contrasts between the superficially light/innocence of life versus the darker, more frightening and painful reality of human existence. This is not so much food for thought, but rather a banquet. Paul

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