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Purgatory

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We're trapped, they said. 

I saw it, have you - 

The eyes that seemed wild with insanity? 

You only get a free one way ticket - 

To the place that feeds on the life of you.  

 

It's a crossroad, they said. 

One path may lead you to Heaven, 

While the other to Hell - 

However, did the naivety of your souls 

Ever give in to ignorance? 

 

Stealing away

A curiosity that there may be another place, 

Hidden from knowledge of death. 

 

Desolation, lifeless loss, 

And crumbling hopes - 

Of seeing loved ones again - 

A harmony of love and peace. 

"Get out, run away." They said, 

Because a grave is no place to rest.

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Comments

Gideon Puccio

Wed 4th Jan 2017 10:26

Exquisite writing. The depth of your words, how they form such a clear picture, filled with such dark and deep imagery is in my opinion is quite extraordinary. Thank you for sharing your gift.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 19th Oct 2016 16:25

Very bold topic, and bravely attacked. Rather convoluted, but what thoughts wouldn't be, on the barest concept of 'purgatory'. It's a deep and divisive idea that has harnessed and harassed fine minds for centuries. Good for you for taking up such a thorny subject. Writing poetry is a superb way of sorting through personal complexities.

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Wed 19th Oct 2016 13:15

I like this - your writing has the feel of being just on the edge of something - as in being not fully, what's the word, not too self-absorbed or confessional - as if you are holding back a little.

there is also a touch of the gothic in the images and most certainly with your choice of photo which for me is not a bad thing.

it would be interesting to see where this poem could go if you removed the words Heaven / Hell / Purgatory and set it free into a totally fictional world.

thanks for posting angi.

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Andy N

Wed 19th Oct 2016 12:57

very dark. my cup of tea (:

excellent

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