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MICHAEL AND MICHELLE

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Michael died, in part at least, when he was 21

Michelle has had three birthdays now since Michael has been gone

She hides the Adam’s Apple that’s protruding from her throat

By wearing her pashmina and top-buttoning her coat

She’s raised her voice an octave and has mastered gentle talk

But cannot hide the strident clumsiness in Michael’s walk

Michael died, in part at least, when he was 21

Michelle has had three birthdays now since Michael has been gone

She cannot buy from Prada; Michelle is no size 10

And shoes are problematic – they don’t do heels for men

Not that she would need them, standing 6 feet tall

But, unlike Cinderella, she will not go to the Ball

Michael died, in part at least, when he was 21

Michelle has had three birthdays now since Michael has been gone

Her nails are finely manicured; Michelle is proud of them

Her fingers though like sausages, her hands like trawlermens’

Embarrassed by the size of them she hides each in a glove

But nothing stops Michelle’s life’s quest to find eternal love

◄ THE RICHEST MAN IN THE WORLD (and other thoughts)

BIGGER GULPS OF AIR (TAX AVOIDANCE FOR OTHERS) ►

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John Coopey

Fri 7th Oct 2016 22:21

MC - many thanks for the observations. Indeed I am often mentioned in the same sentence as Oscar Hammerstein.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 7th Oct 2016 18:24

Touching - and true for many, I suspect. Written and read with just the right degree of humanity. As for "love", I
recall the great lyricist Oscar Hammerstein 11 making it a
personal thing to avoid, if possible, the use of the word
preferring to put across the meaning he intended by other
less direct routes. So, JC, you are not alone in your
creative quandary. But its appearance in your last line
is perfectly judged.

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John Coopey

Thu 6th Oct 2016 23:47

Thanks, Harry. I am always embarrassed about trying to rhyme "love", primarily because it is such a clichéd thing to do but also because this is compounded by there being so few options. My excuse here is the sense of the poem (Michelle's masculine features) warranted sticking her mitts in gloves to hide them.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 6th Oct 2016 21:37

John,
Trying to discuss this mismatch between the mental and bodily is extremely difficult.

Full marks, Martin, for spotting the significance of the italics.

The rhyming - print and audio - is the next best thing to perfect and an absolute pleasure to the ear. (and all without the old tune!)

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John Coopey

Thu 6th Oct 2016 08:34

Thanks, Martin. It's never been a problem for me - saying what I want about difficult subjects.

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Martin Elder

Wed 5th Oct 2016 21:43

Excellent poem John. Not an easy subject to cover, but I like the way you have repeated the lines in Italics, very effective

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