Every breathe is an orgasm
Risking our fantasies into reality
Testing our limits
Loving every second
Concentrating on the tingle of every thrust
When I see you or look at you
I feel trust and passion in every touch
Releasing of this tention is a mind and body sensation
The comfortable absence of talking
The symphony of our moans
Climaxing is too unbearable for us to relax
We lose ourselves every time
...And then theirs a gasp for air
Ideas are strong and sure, believable. Perhaps fewer words would make an even greater impact. The final line is a bit puzzling with 'theirs', but maybe I just don't 'get it'.
You might check 'loose' or 'lose'. If it says 'loose', maybe that's exactly what you wanted. If not, take care with spelling; it's important for page presentation.
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Malissa
Fri 12th Aug 2016 08:15
Thank you so much! you really helped me, I didn't realize I spelled something wrong?