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conditioned surrender

When they say
to hang loose like a fucking piece of laundry,
to await approach without taking flight,
to form a shape and color they can recognize;

That you must become less threatening--
to dangle there limp and unimpending,
to bare and stretch your lacy neckline,
to make lifeless your torn back and tattered torso;

This is when you must surely beware,
for, if you do as they say,
they will watch you all the more carefully,
becoming ever more summarily aware
of every wind's thrust and mind-forsaken wave.

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Comments

elPintor

Sun 19th Jun 2016 19:32

Hi, Ray,

If defeat is most certain, I've no doubt it could be very satisfying to at least make sure there will be nothing left for the opponent to win by the battle's end.

Thanks for lending your commentary,

elP

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raypool

Sun 19th Jun 2016 13:11

This appeals greatly, as it bears a hopelessness in the face of unbeatable odds. A sort of multiple neurosis.

Ray

elPintor

Sat 18th Jun 2016 23:55

Goodness, Phil..no harm no foul, as they say. I often laugh at things I find especially exasperating. And, you got it..it's like the feeling that you're about to get bent over if you give in to those whom you can't please by being what you are.

And, David..I believe I feel you..it's like going through your entire life being programmed and sensing the perturbance of your school masters when all of your education doesn't return to them in a form they can use.

Great comments from the both of you..they really bring out more facets of the idea I tried to convey.

Thanks,

elP

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Various

Sat 18th Jun 2016 23:01

Hey man... I hope I didn't do a disservice by my amusement at your way of delivering a message. Apologies if I did.

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Various

Sat 18th Jun 2016 18:53

This made me laugh at the frustrated disbelief that idiots can bring... and the feeling of being bent over..... like the pictures painted.
Cheers.
Phil.

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