When you're angry at the world,
Coming closer to the edge,
Just remember who you are,
And step back from that ledge
Your heart, it emanates a love
So pure, and full of light,
And like the moon, illuminates
The darkest of nights
Sometimes the joy is hard to find,
You feel you can't hold on,
Have faith in life and stay a while,
The journey's just begun
I enjoyed this too, Eric.
My only minor gripe (I'm contracted to complain) is the rhythmic hiccup in "The darkest of nights". Another beat, "dark nights" or "your nights" might help.
Hahaha, thank you very much :)
A poem I can agree with. Best one I've seen today. Well done. :)
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Eric Berard
Wed 10th Feb 2016 03:50
Bahahaha, yeah I couldn't think of any way to lengthen it to copy the rhythm of the line two up from it, and so, in lengthening it with "darkest of nights" I disrupted the rhythm at the same time. This bothered me a bit, but I figured I'd let it slide