Rainspell

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In quiet contemplation
I sit & listen to the rain
Its gentle beat, its soothing tone
Then its torrent once again
It is a natural cleanser
That washes quite away
All these pesky feelings
That are so determined to stay


I wish I had another soul


To sit with here, who might
Enjoy the rain & like to share
This music of the night
But alas I sit alone
And listen once again
To the symphony outside my window 
The throbbing singing of the rain

Rain

◄ Self Indulgent

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Comments

J Graham

Thu 14th Jan 2016 02:53

Love the serenity of this poem.
That line, wishing to sit with another soul.
I pictured myself siting next to you smiling and enjoying the peaceful sounds of the rain.

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Vicki Ayers

Tue 12th Jan 2016 15:49

Thank you for your comments Wolfgar

It's interesting what you've said about the line

'I wish I had another soul'

being a stand alone line as when I read this I put a pause there before I continue - maybe I should leave a space in the text to indicate this?

Thanks again for taking the time to read & comment it's much appreciated x

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Wolfgar Miere

Tue 12th Jan 2016 15:08

I like the way you make the rain sexy by suggesting it throbs, seriously though its an interesting and different interpretation I haven't heard before, but it makes sense to me.

When I read the line "I wish I had another soul" I was hoping you were going to leave it as a stand alone statement. Personally, I just wish I had a soul!

Rain therapy works you can even download it, which I recommend.

Wolfgar.

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