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Rainspell

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In quiet contemplation
I sit & listen to the rain
Its gentle beat, its soothing tone
Then its torrent once again
It is a natural cleanser
That washes quite away
All these pesky feelings
That are so determined to stay


I wish I had another soul


To sit with here, who might
Enjoy the rain & like to share
This music of the night
But alas I sit alone
And listen once again
To the symphony outside my window 
The throbbing singing of the rain

Rain

◄ Self Indulgent

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Comments

J Graham

Thu 14th Jan 2016 02:53

Love the serenity of this poem.
That line, wishing to sit with another soul.
I pictured myself siting next to you smiling and enjoying the peaceful sounds of the rain.

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Vicki Ayers

Tue 12th Jan 2016 15:49

Thank you for your comments Wolfgar

It's interesting what you've said about the line

'I wish I had another soul'

being a stand alone line as when I read this I put a pause there before I continue - maybe I should leave a space in the text to indicate this?

Thanks again for taking the time to read & comment it's much appreciated x

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