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Cornwall

The orange disc of the sun

is slowly engulfed by the black horizon.

 

Our faces glow in the flames.

A soft breeze cools salty sunburned skin.

The fire cracks.

A dog barks.

The tide rolls in and in and in.

 

Our children are sihouettes,

yelling

racing

chasing waves

or standing still

heads down, side by side,

savouring the sensation

of sand pulled through toes by the tide.

 

We drink tea from the thermos

and watch wordless,

our breath slow.

Silenced anxieties drift away

with the orange sparks

that hover then rise,

floating upwards,

into restful August skies.

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Tom Harding

Mon 9th Nov 2015 23:55

Lovely, vivid scenes. Very evocative.

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Julie Anne Sugden

Sun 8th Nov 2015 19:18

Thanks for the comments. The poems I've put on so far are fairly old. It takes me ages before I'm happy enough with anything to let anyone see it. I don't do enough writing but will perhaps be inspired to do more.

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Julie Anne Sugden

Sun 8th Nov 2015 18:57

Ha! Yes bog should be dog!!

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 8th Nov 2015 12:42

Reading this on Remembrance Sunday morning makes me
wonder how many thoughts of the lost in war turned to
home and images of other more carefree days as they
endured the horrors of conflict in far-away places.
Evocative - and a welcome antidote to the downsides of
life.

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DavidAddington

Sat 7th Nov 2015 21:14

Love it Jules and this is the first time I get to read your creative writing, knowing you as a colleague and friend. Just one thing is the word 'bog' meant to be 'dog'? Not sure. Like Graham says - great use of the senses. Female poets are so different I think to male poets - different sense of the world around us - wonder and intrigue. Post up more.

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 7th Nov 2015 12:22

This is an "I can almost smell it" piece of work.
Kids on the beach doing kids stuff, perfect. I can hear the cork coming out of the bottle too!

Well done Julie Anne

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