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Small talk.

While walking down the street today

I chanced upon old acquaintance.

Breakfast weather debate depleted,

we tucked into a mid-morning snack.

 

Marathon days and snickers ways

from beautiful South to bountiful North

and back to the garden of Alice, whose knickers

were wrapped round the washing line

and whose skirts were spragged to the floor.

 

An arm full of shopping and a mind full of your...

my bladder about to burst. I stubbed my toe in the

revolving door and I swore !

that there in my reflection,

I saw Alice!

 

 

◄ Daphne Demure

Syllabic Nightmare. ►

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 16th Jul 2009 00:09

Spragged to the floor sounds quite drastic - wasn't that the technique for propping up the roof in mine shafts? Loved the 'Marathon days and snickers ways ' line.. :)

Best wishes

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winston plowes

Sat 20th Jun 2009 21:15

Hi Janet, What is "spragged to the floor"? Win x

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Memoir

Sat 20th Jun 2009 14:00

A good poem Janet, the way the write seems to have a very easy flow. I liked your description of the marathon and snickers, and a nice rhyme used by you. I enjoyed the story.
Nice work

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Isobel

Fri 19th Jun 2009 16:03

Derrrr - thanks for your explanation - I'm getting it now. Sometimes I'm a little dense - I like to blame it on the kids - someone has to take the blame. An amusing piece Janet and so different.
Isobel x

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Isobel

Thu 18th Jun 2009 17:51

I'm not quite understanding this one Janet - you'll have to explain it to me. It sounds very clever though and great that you are finding time to write - on that note I'd better start making a pick...

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Noetic-fret!

Thu 18th Jun 2009 01:34

Hi janet, i did smile by the time i got to the end of this piece where you saw alice. I like the Alice in wonderland tale. From big to small and small to big (depending on the pill you take of course). Many plays on words i like, such as the revolving door that made the character swear. It invoked more from my imagination.

Be well

Mike

x

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Andy N

Wed 17th Jun 2009 14:06

lovely beat in this, Janet. One of my more personal favs off yours! Keep this quality up!

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