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The Kestrel

Two people I know wrote nature poems about ketrels. Despite knowing my views on nature poems, they showed them to me.  I wrote this one:

 

By Kirby’s rotting flat block greys

where sixties urban dreams decay

against the skyline you might glimpse

by overpass and motorways

a kestrel hovering aimless

 

Pushed to the edge by man’s advances

or by fate and circumstances

its super strength losing out

undermined by lack of chances

scavenging wherever it can

 

By Kirby’s flat blocks nature’s loser

often seen near bargain booze

the kestrel with its super strength

but lack of choice of life to choose

scavenging whatever it can

 

◄ Symphonetic

Patterns in darkness ►

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DG

Sat 30th May 2009 16:37

Thanks all. Francine, Kirby est une région au bord de la Liverpool elle est trés belle; tu doit La visiter une fois. Augusta, Darling, our leader is looking forward to meeting you. Steve, I don't believe in free will because our brains are made of chemicals and our minds are the mental product of those chemicals and thermodynamics together with the interpretation that we put on current stimuli in the light of our back-stories, and as such our decisions are just a by-product of all of those things obeying the laws of physics and sociology.

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Francine

Sat 30th May 2009 16:19

Salut DG!
J'aime beaucoup ce poème...
I like the fact that you can interpret the Kestrel as a metaphor for man...
Love the rhyming, flowing, profundity of it all... ; )

Juste une question... qu'est-ce que c'est Kirby's?

<Deleted User> (6292)

Sat 30th May 2009 15:06

Hello Dermot
How many are there of you?
Take me to your leader.

Your poem is stark and minimalist .. simplistic and quite beautiful.

Coincidently Bargain Booze sells a minimalist larger...branded Kestrel.. of course only the grey people know about that.

Augusta


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winston plowes

Sat 30th May 2009 00:13

Hi Dermot... This is raw and real and fantastic. Winston

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Steve Regan

Sat 30th May 2009 00:00

Good stuff, neat contrasts in habitats, and a hint of this great paradox ... that wildlife seem noble in their 'natural settings' (besmirched though they be at the substantial edges by man); yet man, for all his modern corruptions, is perhaps the superior beast.

Because men (and women) write poetry; kestrals don't.

Also hinted at, humankind's moral choices - a consequence of the great gift to humans of free will, which mere animals, in their simplicity, needn't bother about.

Big themes ... with Kirkby, of all places, as a backdrop.

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Andy N

Fri 29th May 2009 21:52

Nice Dermot.. Enjoyed it at Inn Verse too

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