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Snapshot Narrative

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The remains of a day                                                              

lie extinguished, discarded,

disregarded by the passers-by.

 

Silver-tipped echo of a mouth

unremarked upon

and common

in its everyday normality.

 

Evocatively comforting

in stained familiarity;

an endless capability

for rainbow possibilities

of shining eyes and laughter lines,

tequila secrets, vodka sobs,

sambuca snot and promises

to kiss and tell

the tales of a half-starved mind:

 

a wide-eyed Friday night

tongue-tip let-it-rip

club-queue puff;

 

a chance meet, catching up –

 

            how’s the kids?

            you’re looking well

            where you off?

            be good!

 

a rubied reminiscence

of minor misdemeanors,

under-age everything;

overwrought rage;

 

a backstage pre-gig minted inhalation;

synaptic satiety, dopamine reward;

 

a post-chip-barm

application in vermillion;

a street scene signalling

an end or a beginning;

 

ten minutes killed

in a bus-stop trance;

a midnight taxi rank

hand-to-eye dance;

a dawn walk accoutrement

brazening the birdsong,

a smile on her face

and her head held high.

 

The remains of a day

lie myriad, reflective,

a snapshot narrative

provocatively beckoning

the hungry-eyed muse.

 

 

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Comments

Travis Brow

Thu 5th Mar 2015 07:17

''a snapshot narrative

provocatively beckoning

the hungry-eyed muse.''

This is it; the nub, the font of inspiration. You nailed it.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 4th Feb 2015 13:25

Thanks Ian - much happier with this than the 'Framed' haiku, which I've now removed!

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 3rd Feb 2015 19:15

YES! much better Laura - reminds me of one of those 1960's dramas - all monochrome and 'life in a day' type context. Picture works well with the words - nicely understated - something you see every day but WHAM! those words bring the drama's of such a simple image to life - good 'un chuck

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Laura Taylor

Tue 3rd Feb 2015 09:48

Cheers Greg - yes, that's exactly how I wanted to frame it. That moment of your eyes alighting on something, then the crazed few seconds of the possibilities :)

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

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Greg Freeman

Mon 2nd Feb 2015 16:14

A quiet beginning and end to this, Laura, which I'm sure is what you intended. "Tequila secrets" is the line that first catches the eye, lifts the head, I reckon. "Brazening the birdsong" is great.

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