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Faulty

My faults are many, my problems few

Perhaps too many I tell, but just not you

Through rifts and valleys I suppose you were there

Mostly too self absorbed was I, neglecting to care

I see that now, I will see it still

In years to come when I am old and ill

Troubled am I with a past I cant change

Weary am I with thoughts of mumbling rage

Sorry to say I have let so much slip by

No longer will I live by the words of a lie

Regrettably so, she lay hurt in my wake

Regrettably so, I was the only mistake

She lives in my mind she swims in my dreams

Nobodies perfect but she mended my seams

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Starfish

Thu 23rd Jan 2014 20:30

I enjoyed reading this and particularly liked the rhyme.

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alan barlow

Thu 23rd Jan 2014 15:56

thanks, very much appreciate it im still learning and hope i continue for many a year to come thank you for your input

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 22nd Jan 2014 16:00

I'm a fan of verse that tells a story and scans
well in the main. Good to see this post.
Two points: I would have been tempted to use
""Too self-absorbed, I neglected to care" instead
of "Mostly self-absorbed (etc.,) - to keep the rhyming rhythm going...and sought to use "derange"
instead of "mumbling rage" to the same end.

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