you breathe out
I breathe in
I breathe out
you breathe in
I decide….
not to breathe
so we stand
lip to lip
heart to heart
hip to hip
open my
eyes to see
your eyes
widening
why should I
give my breath
I can stop
when I want
as you wait
for oxygen
I see thoughts
behind your eyes.
I hold my breath…..
<Deleted User> (11485)
Fri 27th Sep 2013 22:46
Deeply beautiful.
Only just found this and am very struck. For me, it's had the biggest difference between a straight read-through and the audio track of anything I've ever encountered on WOL. For those who skip the audio, make an exception for this one.
And I was just thinking this week - I wonder where Ann is - and there you are - poetical guns blazing - like some ancient Celtic sorceress.
<Deleted User> (6315)
Tue 7th May 2013 00:58
ahhh Ann..simply lovely and sensual and all in few words which are not needed are they?..great stuff
:)
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 17:47
Great stuff! :)
Wow - I'm impressed - at your control as a poet and in your imagination.
I'd agree with Graham's words - highly sensuous!
This is quite simply a lovely piece Ann.
Both sensuous and hesitant. A wonderful mature story
Nice and brief Ann;great sense of anticipation in this one,especially in the last stanza,'as you wait for oxygen,I see thoughts behind your eyes. I hold my breath.'
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sash
Thu 17th Oct 2013 10:35
simple n beautiful ann!!