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Life

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Life

In deed and indecision
with words or their omission,
by strategy or compulsion
In inertia or revolution.

To reach the moon, to sail the seas
to conquer lands, plant hopeful seeds.

In baking bread in breaking bread,
in building up with worn out tools
the loaded language of imperialist fools,

for all you are, and all you’re not
with cross to bare
or atheist lot.

In openness and in dogma
in shame and in honour,
for cruelty and care
for all your love and life’s despair.

With received wisdom,
and evolved doubt.
With laconic wit
or scream and shout!

In woven hopes
and interlaced lies
through veiled thoughts
and prying eyes.

In cynical trinkets
and pyramid schemes,
in wandering fields...
and burgeoning dreams

Life
 

◄ Wirral Ode Show - Open floor Night - January

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David Blake

Sat 23rd Feb 2013 17:20

I love this Chris. Good work!

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Chris Co

Tue 5th Feb 2013 15:16

Thx Frederick - feedback appreciated.

Thank you to all who read.

Best Chris

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Fkx

Mon 4th Feb 2013 09:17

The cadence provided rhythmic symmetry, its rhymes flowing without burden on the listening ear. A pleasant read. Thanks for sharing.

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Chris Co

Sat 2nd Feb 2013 19:48

Thx Laura, John.

Rhythm was certainly an important consideration in putting this together, so I'm glad it shows and works for you both.

Cheers

Hey Laura, I hadn't thought of marriage vows at the time, but yes I can certainly see it in that light now you mention it. Great to get differing interpretations.

Thx guys

Best

Chris

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John Coopey

Fri 1st Feb 2013 21:08

Love the rhythm in this, Chris.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 1st Feb 2013 15:04

I like this very much indeed Chris. In some ways it reminds me of marriage vows, and there's some excellent wordplay in there. This will perform brilliantly I reckon.

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