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My son's first love

 

I said to myself I would like you

After all

We had both been swimming

Against a tide

A thing worth having…

And all that

 

 ‘There isn’t a girl in this world that doesn’t like me’

I said to him

Wanting that to be true

And one day in floats you

Quietly striding the breadth

Of the living room

Terrified

Expecting to see a monster

That was never there

 

Your bravery was already legend to me

I overheard a tale

Disguised in a durge

That without thinking

You dived in

Breathing life

Into a soul

Half drowned

Believing

As I did

A precious thing

Resided

In a hard shell

 

So I knew I was going to like you

You were already beautiful

Before I saw

How beautiful you are

◄ Cheers

The Last Word ►

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Cathy

Mon 25th Mar 2013 12:09

Thanks Steve and Hugh. New experiences always inspire me. But I couldn't show her the poem, she'd be terrified of me again!

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Hugh

Sat 2nd Feb 2013 15:34

Fabulous flow brilliantly creating the atmosphere of a new member entering the prospective mother-in-laws domain and the last four lines ,magic !!Transmitting the acceptance and full approval of the new flower in your son's life.Your comment ,"I adore her" says it all.I hope she reads it .

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Cathy

Sat 2nd Feb 2013 13:51

Isobel- I adore her! Thank you x

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Isobel

Thu 31st Jan 2013 21:20

Nice one Cathy. Your kids partners are every parents nightmare - there's just no choosing for them.

I love the delicacy in this. And I also like the way the poem leaves me building the background story.

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