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FOR LINDA ...Just turned fourteen....?

 

(A birthday celebration)

 

 

When did it happen Linda?

You were not so yesterday.

 

(How strange: the way

The young bud unnoticed grows,

Then at the break of it`s appointed day

Is suddenly a rose)

 

Was it the moon, last night,

Serene from the lovely zenith of her height,

Worked this white

Bewilder – witchery,

Most secretly

In the silent shedding of her light?

 

Now I can plainly see

You are not as you were before,

And somehow it doesn`t seem right

To call you `Little Linda` any more.

All the old candid, easy camaraderie-

All the old boistering - now seems out of place

And from henceforward courtesy

Must match this new regality of grace.

 

And though I feel dismay

That you, who used to play

All the livelong day

Out in the open courtyards of your eyes

Pace now the pensive cloisters of your thought,

Know girl, certain strangeness are wrought

 In all beginings. And though you ponder

With sidelong glances of surmise,

And chafe at the unaccustomed stateliness,

You cannot guess

What I,

 made daft again with the whole wonder

Of what Woman is – and why,

See with my poet`s eye.

 

And so if, in some future day,

They say

That this time came and went

Without event

Tell them they lie!

Tell them the deep-most sigh

Of the deep-most breathing of this night`s sea

Lifted a lovely creature on the shore,

Who sat and combed her hair and, silverly,

Spoke with the night-wind whispering off the tor.

Tell them the Holy One who guards the height

Tip-toed down the mountain-side to see,

How all the stars danced so exultantly

That the heavens dindled with delight.

Tell them great Gabriel playfully was pushed

By heavens` populace out of Paradise

And sent to see, And to the hushed

World bent, was glad, and returned with smiling eyes.

Tell them that daintily through the delicate air,

A peal of Fairy-bells was heard to ring.

…And tell them…

That one old poet

With straw-stalks sticking in his hair

Began to sing.

 

◄ LOGGOS

LEO`S DREAM ►

Comments

Philipos

Thu 29th Nov 2012 22:17

Harry, your piece reminded me of the moment in 'Shadowlands' when the young students are discussing the rosebud which when having bloomed suddenly lost all its mystery.

Just checked out some of your other work as well. Great style.

CHEERS.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 14th Nov 2012 00:24

The great lyricist Alan Jay Lerner found a
similar inspiration, albeit in a more romantic vein, with his lyric for his Oscar winning song "Gigi". For example:
"Oh Gigi, while you were trembling on the brink
Was I out yonder somewhere blinking
At a star?
Oh Gigi, have I been standing up too close
Or back too far?"
Harry - your words are a rare delight and fully
deserving of all the praise you have obtained.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 11th Nov 2012 13:57


Thanks everyone for your comments - very much appreciated.

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Isobel

Fri 9th Nov 2012 19:48

Beautiful Harry. Magical, mystical, classical - are there any more als I can think up?

I love it because it is so different to anything on here - so romantic (in the nicest sense), so reminiscent of the greats, so worked on, so crafted, so gentle...

And I just love the ending - the contrast between old and young and the wonder of life.

So nice to see an appreciation of woman also!

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Laura Taylor

Fri 9th Nov 2012 15:11

An incredible poem.

As a grown woman, I remember the time when it felt like the whole of the male population suddenly not only noticed I was there, but pretty much threw themselves at my feet. I was bemused. Same person I was yesterday, yet today I have all this power! It was spell-binding.

You've captured it from the other side Harry, and I think this is a blindingly honest and, I have to say, brave poem, given how society looks on any kind of male gaze these days, especially in relation to girls on the brink of womanhood.

You've managed to re-bestow the genuine adoration of a girl who is blossoming into a woman, without any hint of anything exploitative or sordid in any way whatsoever.

And you have wrapped the whole thing in layer upon layer of translucence and silk - the words shimmer on the page. I may be rambling but I know what I mean! Beautifully written.

I stand up to applaud you - this is a fantastic poem, in so many ways x

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John Coopey

Fri 9th Nov 2012 12:34

Wow, Harry!
Your best ever!
"dindled"? It's not in my dictionary. But I don't care. It's perfect. I shall use it as though it's my own.
A grand-daughter I assume?
...and the change from boisterousness to something more respectful is perfect too. I well recall the change I went through with my own daughters undergoing that difficult transition from Daft Dad to a more confused and uncertain role.
Again, perfect. Best I've read in a long day's march.

tony sheridan

Fri 9th Nov 2012 11:57

Beautiful. Take care, Tony.

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Dave Bradley

Thu 8th Nov 2012 19:29

Wow!

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Francine

Thu 8th Nov 2012 17:30

What a gift!
I echo everything Anthony says...

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Anthony Emmerson

Thu 8th Nov 2012 17:03

What a beautiful tribute and dedicication Harry. Anyone would be moved to have something this eloquent written about them. In this age of materialism something so personal and heartfelt has no price, yet shows perfectly the old adage - It's the thought that counts. I hope it brings a tear to her eye, for all the best reasons.

Regards,
A.E.

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