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Reality Check

Amongst the crowd
She never noticed me
Not one glance
But she was all I could see

 

It seemed unreal
Not quite right
That she was there
She’s your wife

 

My dreams crushed
My heart torn
I slip away
Irrelevant and small

 

Amongst the crowd
She never noticed me
Not one glance
But she was all I could see

 

© Katypoetess 2012

lovelove poemlove poetry

◄ Of Lilith and Anthony

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Isobel

Wed 10th Oct 2012 20:38

Not necessarily guilt, Anthony. It could be a feeling of sorrow, jealousy, failure or a mixture of all three. I think the 'irrelevant and small' sums it up nicely.

If I'd had to give it a title, it would have been 'Less than..'. You convey that message well.

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Anthony Emmerson

Wed 10th Oct 2012 20:14

I guess that'll be guilt then Katy! Nicely observed.

Regards,
A.E.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 8th Oct 2012 12:42

On his shoulder
Vulture sitting still
Repeating diplomatic fashion
Seeing her again?

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Hugh

Sun 7th Oct 2012 11:58

Dramatic ,I could feel the tension and drama in so few lines.I like the way you have ended it with a repeat of the openning verse-most effective. Well done !!

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