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Crescent Moon

 

crescent moon

sliver of gold

hovers over

clouds of pink

in wide expanse

of bluest blue

as sun sets

on august night.

 

great day out

meeting friends

sussex coast

fish’n’chip lunch

seaside café

stony beach

walking the dog

concreted prom

sharing stories

exchanging views

invited back

holiday home

converted barn

cake and coffee

many laughs

wine or beer

salted cashews

over all too soon.

 

crescent moon

spotted again

through tall trees

darkening skies

just a sliver

gold turned silver

as she heralds

journey home.

◄ Oblivious

Greengage Anyone? ►

Comments

tony sheridan

Wed 24th Oct 2012 20:10

Love this. Take care, Tony.

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Lynn Dye

Wed 5th Sep 2012 22:08

Thank you Stef and Tricia, you are very kind. xx

Laura, I expect the problem is that this is my recollection of a day I enjoyed, so it's more of a personal thing, and does not compute so well to anyone else. I agree the middle needs changing in some way, shall have to think about that one. Thanks very much for comment. x

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Laura Taylor

Wed 5th Sep 2012 10:23

I really like the first and last verses Lynn, but feel it becomes too 'tell' and not enough 'show' in the middle, if you know what I mean?

<Deleted User> (6895)

Tue 4th Sep 2012 23:17

We think,tis your best one yet Lynn-
really nice.xx

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