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Bed

 

 

Never mine at first

Teenage purse wouldn’t stretch

to antique pine,

to posts

Your predecessor,

structureless,

lay low;  

squat stained

stripey lumpen

dough

 

First embrace in ‘88

Behind you lived a history

of needledrop and resin

I wondered if you’d ever

fruited cones

Lovers lain,

hes and shes

Dreams conceived,

in somniacal vision clips;

some stayed

embryonic,

others realised

 

In later days

a daughter moved

in me, still blind,

alive within your

antique arms;

a living breathing

wooden womb,

scarified by

tantrum kicks

and clumsy midnight

cigarettes

Twilight dappled

waiting eyes

as we two lay

umbrellaed

in our umbilical

bed

 

 

◄ On Not Wearing Purple

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Comments

Philipos

Sun 28th Oct 2012 22:44

Hi Laura, just spotted this & enjoyed it for the clever overall imagery. 'Stripey lumpen dough' eh? Whatever next! Well done.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 13th Sep 2012 13:32

Hi Gray - thanks again fella :)

Ah - again I am going to say no to your suggested change, because if you think about it, my daughter moves 'in' me, she isn't yet born, that's why our eyes are waiting. So we can't lie side by side, just yet anyway :)

Yeh - please, feel free to share :)

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Poets Corner

Thu 13th Sep 2012 13:16

Oh Laura What a nother 'great write' mate...so proud of you...can I make just one observation on this lovely Poem 1. I'm pissed off cos' I never wrote it! and 2. I would add the words 'side by side' after umbrellaed...so it reads - 'Twighlight dappled waiting eyes...
as we two lay...
umbrellaed - side by side...
in our umbilical bed.

Only a suggestion darlin' ok mate?
Let me know if ok to share this on my 'timeline' Thanks Gray xxx

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Isobel

Wed 5th Sep 2012 21:35

Yes - I like the conception imagery too - that's my favourite verse. I've never really thought of beds in that way - but I guess they do have a story to tell, the older and more stained they become :)

I think this is a very original poem.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 5th Sep 2012 10:20

Eh up Dave! Cheers fella - appreciate it :) I did have to lug it upstairs too at the time...up a bloody ladder ha :D Glad you like the conception theme :)

Thanks Steve and Greg - took a while to kick this one into shape, so I'm pleased it worked.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 5th Sep 2012 07:55

This is very satisfying to read, Laura - condensed, tight and effective language, and with a story to tell.

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Dave Carr

Tue 4th Sep 2012 21:10

Great stuff - as usual. I like the squat stained stripey lumpen dough - perfect description. Imagine lugging that up the stairs! Also the conception theme is excellent. Thanks for comment on Compy Dompy too. Late but I've been v busy. Dave

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