I asked my husband this morning
To make me marmite on toast
Lightly toasted please
Lots of butter
Lots of marmite
Cut into triangles
Pooling and chaotically spread
It arrives
Two whole slices
Slightly burnt
Marmite and butter evenly spread
I smile gratefully, yet I’m perplexed
If I asked my lover to do the same
Would he get it right first time?
© Katy Hughes 2012
Naughty but nice , loads of meaning and drama cleverly spread in just a few lines.Well done
Yes a common occurence when the prize has been won and effort to impress is no longer needed.
I think this would be even more effective without the last line - 'He did'
We know the writer has a lover and the delicious suspense would be more effective.
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Hugh
Wed 18th Jul 2012 22:43
"Cleverly spread,"was inded intentional-used to pass the marmite factory on my way to work in Burton upon Trent.The smell was horrendous first thing in the morning -its a by product of the brewing industry,hence why it was based there.