With Love Only

Wednesday 21st March 2012 5:32 pm

I hear the music of the Creator
In the fire of the sunset, in the blue darkness of the night,
In a starling’s song – a spring’s curator
Even when the quietness is tight.

It seems that love embraces all the creatures.
No more sadness, loss and tears.
No more wars, no more killed soldiers,
And only Madonna tenderly cradle her dears.

But how to understand where the evil vanished?
How can you distinguish love from hate?
How to survive in spite of all the deaths
And know that our life is our mate?

To know love we have to know evil,
Clean our souls of envy and revenge.
There is simply no the other way out.
With only love beautiful life you can entrench.

life

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Comments

<Deleted User> (10123)

Sun 25th Mar 2012 11:09

Hi Larisa,
Tis I who fall before thee to ask for pardon since I betrayed the first rule: Never read poetry quickly - I came, I read, I erred, forgiveness is a quality enjoyed by those who are gracious. Be gentle with this pen-wright who has - got it wrong again! - Ta muchly, Nick.

Yvonne Brunton

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 20:53

Well done Larissa.I love the seniments behind this poem and you have expressed them so well. There is such peacefulness in the first verse.
There are some great phrases. As well as the ones already mentioned, I especially like the line:-
'In a starling's song - a spring's creator'
though maybe I'd have put 'The Spring's creator' as the 'a' implies that for other Springs there are other curators ( which there may well be, and, that may be what you meant anyway)
In English sentences being analysed ( parsed) are divided, at first, into 2 parts:- subject and predicate. The subject governs the main verb. The predicate contains all the rest of the sentence which is not the subject, i.e. the verb and the object (if there is one) and any other information. Hope this helps.

M.C. Newberry

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 16:56

A charming concept, tenderly expressed.

Lynn Dye

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 11:49

Aww Nick, all my pets over the years have showed me much love aplenty!

Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 05:18

Thank you, dear Lynn, for the comment. I am happy to know that you like it.

Dear Nick! Look here! “Love embraces all the creatures", ‘love’ here is a subject,
‘embraces’ is a predicate’, ‘the creatures’ – objects. Anything can be an object:
human being, flora and fauna and even the table which was made by a carpenter with love.
‘Creature’, ‘to create’, ‘creative’ ‘Creator’ – all these words have one common root.
I could also write “All creatures are embraced with love”, couldn’t I?
As to the animals that have only instincts and man who holds love. There are a lot of animals which show their love feeling much better than some men. And… there are a lot of, so called, men which have only
instincts. So, here we come to the question:
What is love?

With warmest wishes and love,
Larisa

<Deleted User> (10123)

Wed 21st Mar 2012 23:58

'Fire of the sunset' - 'quietness is tight' brilliantly conjoured piece. One tiny point with - 'love embraces all the creatures' - I find that animals have only insticts. Man is the creature that holds love. Does this infer there is an omni-entity watching over all? Is this from within the narrator? Ta much, Nick.

Lynn Dye

Wed 21st Mar 2012 21:58

I enjoyed this, Larisa, I agree it's one of your best. xx

Larisa Rzhepishevska

Wed 21st Mar 2012 17:36

Thank you, dear Patricia & Stefan!

<Deleted User> (6895)

Wed 21st Mar 2012 17:17

We just had to come on
earlier than usual
to say
that this is one of your best poems.

Lots of lovely lines-lovely Larisa!
very well done-you must keep writing.

Warm regards and lots of love.xx

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