And yet you show surprise

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The world's so queer, and yet you show surprise
to find him solid in the midday light.
He looks at you with strangely laughing eyes.

You told yourself you're sure to recognise
the green-clad arms, the ring upon the right;
the world's so queer, and yet you show surprise?

His name won't pass your lips. You know... those guys.
You know his name. At least you think you might.
He looks at you with strangely laughing eyes.

The happy folk? And after many tries
you force a smile, a single smile, polite.
"The world's so queer, and yet you show surprise...

You've seen me here before, contrariwise;
You can't pretend you don't recall the sight."
He looks at you with strangely laughing eyes.


(Your sister's outer clothing all of lies.)
(Your brother was a changeling in the night.)

The world's so queer, and yet you show surprise.
He looks at you with strangely laughing eyes.

◄ Some folk are born with knowledge of their goal

Coincidence ►

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John Coopey

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 23:19

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John Coopey

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 23:14

I suspect you know what you're doing, TT.
Nice villanelle.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 21st Mar 2012 12:36

The content is challenging...with some other-worldly imagery that gets under the skin. I am
still contemplating the meaning of "the green-clad arms"!

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Yvonne Brunton

Wed 21st Mar 2012 11:38

I enjoyed this. I found it rather sinister. I think it's the repeated line 'strangely laughing eyes' it's a bit like Shakespeare's Mark Anthony's ironic 'Brutus was a honourable man' - the repetition plants seeds of doubt
Nice to see a villanelle cropping up ( I didn't know what one was til I read Dylan Thomas's 'Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night'
Keep up the good work. XX

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Marnanel Thurman

Wed 21st Mar 2012 09:12

Thanks, Nick. Yes, it's a villanelle: I don't write many of them, and I think I'm not at my best in this form, but I'm enjoying learning.

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Nick Clifton

Wed 21st Mar 2012 09:03

This one seems a bit 'dressed up', fairy nough! He said with a single smile, not forced though. Slightly different to what I've read before yet equally enjoyable. Does the placement of the repeated lines mean this style has a specific name? Many thanks TT for sharing this. Ta much, Nick.

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