Valerie Cook

You Are....

by Valerie Cook

Saturday 11th February 2012 5:13 am (first posted Friday 10th February 2012 10:22 am)

YOU ARE

You are the ivy

That invaded and muffled my walls.

You are the distance between you and me

Measured in tears.

You are the buttons on my coat

That fasten me in to keep me warm.

You are the comfort food

That I desire in copious amounts.

You are the journey

That I am ready and willing to take.

You are the fuel

That drives my engine everywhere.

You are the one

Who pushes my buttons and ticks all my boxes

You are the sum total

Of all my needs

ValCook 2012

Valentine poem Johnny Depp xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

◄ Awake and watchful

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Comments

Jeff Dawson

Sun 19th Aug 2012 00:21

Hi Val, thanx for comment on Get a Life, just reading this, like it, the pauses after 'That' on each line look good too, be good to perform X

PS Be good to see u at the Brooklyn, next one tonite!

Dave Bradley

Sun 19th Feb 2012 08:36

Only just found this Val, and like it. It seems to combine longing (journey. distance) and having (ivy, buttons) and isn't that often the way.

Val Cook

Mon 13th Feb 2012 15:59

Thanks Cynthia,it probably would benefit some adjustment.

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 13th Feb 2012 15:20

I do like this, Val. IMO, I would flip stanzas 5 and 6, and then leave it right there, in full power.

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Sat 11th Feb 2012 20:40

A lovely poem Val, I really like the repetition of 'you are', it gives the poem focus and the rhythm of a heart beat. I like that you are combined the actual (copious food) with the figurative (journey) very cleverly. A wonderful tribute to love. x

Anthony Emmerson

Sat 11th Feb 2012 16:12

Hi Val,

A good balance of illustrations of the trials, triumphs and tragedies of all human relationships. A real tribute.

Now if only someone would write one like that about me! :(

Regards,
A.E. :)

Val Cook

Sat 11th Feb 2012 05:16

Thanks everyone for your comments . I have tweeked the poem a little.

Lynn Dye

Fri 10th Feb 2012 23:13

I enjoyed this very much, Val, some great verses. (And yes, Johnny Depp would tick all my boxes too!)

Isobel

Fri 10th Feb 2012 13:59

Johnny Depp - I like your taste in valentines :) Maybe that's where I go wrong!

I like this - though I would be tempted to put the first verse into present tense to match the rest. Also not sure about the word muffling - think there are possibly better ones - but that is just a matter of opinion.

Greg Freeman

Fri 10th Feb 2012 12:26

I really like this, Val. I found the first five stanzas so remarkable that I would end it after "You are the journey / That I am ready and willing to take." But it's your poem, of course.

steve mellor

Fri 10th Feb 2012 11:35

Obvious that I like it (cos I don't comment otherwise), but what of tomorrow, or is this moment in time sufficient?

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