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the note

 

"Did you have a good fuck?"

The note lies in the kitchen bin.

I've just come in from a date with the new man.

 

To me, our marriage was long over.

But the jagged writing told

this was not the case for you.

And, if I did have a good screw

I can't remember.

 

The pain held in that note

is with me still, thirty years on.

 

And your kindness and your dignity

when you changed your mind

and hid that note from me.

 

 

 

the kindness of ex-husbands

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in arms not meant ►

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Laura Taylor

Mon 28th Nov 2011 11:07

I liked this Ann - no idea if it's autobiog or not, but the sentiments are heartbreaking

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Sun 27th Nov 2011 12:39

I like how you turned it around to regret! seeing his note. It says a lot in a short poem. like it xx

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Fri 25th Nov 2011 23:45


Got my attention and easy to visualise too Ann

works for me :)

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Isobel

Fri 25th Nov 2011 20:28

I admire you for letting your imagination run riot. This doesn't sound like a autobiographical experience from what I know of you. I also like all the implicit emotions you weave into this story.

As Ray says, this isn't particularly poetic - especially that last verse. I can hardly criticise anyone for that though as my last two efforts haven't been either. Sometimes on WOL, it's about whether a poem strikes a chord, engenders discussion, because we are a community.

I must admit to liking poetry about the dynamics of relationships so I enjoyed this. x

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Ray Miller

Fri 25th Nov 2011 20:15

I can admire the poem for its restraint and simplicity. I do think it lacks a bit poetically, though.Should it not be "The note lay in the kitchen bin"?

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Lynn Dye

Fri 25th Nov 2011 20:01

Ouch, painful one, Ann. Well written. xx

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Nick Coleman

Fri 25th Nov 2011 19:10

Moving, says it all. this one hurt

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