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The Death of a Tree

Bending down, amber becoming,

the furthest thought of,

combing,

she sends her children to the earth,

the spiced percussive hazel girls,

with eyes like warm chocolate cups.

 

A moth brushes the afternoon,

grey flecked hair from mouth to wing,

and waits on her beating heart,

quiet,

her arms rising

in the tender wind,

where he loves - a moving antique orange.

 

Struck silver,

into the fading light,

on bent knee,

she makes a sound,

“ Do not leave me like this”

but the dusk is long in her throat,

serving a grave wood,

and soon,

all is quiet.

 

 

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Laura Taylor

Fri 9th Sep 2011 13:12

This is lovely, velvety...I absolutely love that first stanza - spiced percussive hazel girls,
with eyes like warm chocolate cups - wow

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 9th Sep 2011 10:42

I love it!

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 9th Sep 2011 10:29

"A moth brushes the afternoon,
grey flecked hair from mouth to wing".

You know I have always admired your work Marianne. To get a couple of lines like these into a piece is all I ever want in my work. Clever words indeed.

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Andy N

Fri 9th Sep 2011 08:04

nice stuff, Marianne.. I'm a particular fan of the last stanza here (oppositee to Ray I know - lol) but enjoyed the full piece..x

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Fri 9th Sep 2011 00:44

Ray! I do suffer from acute comma pox, they, appear, mid sentence, sometimes for no reason,and i, need to stop .

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Ray Miller

Thu 8th Sep 2011 20:13

A lorra, lorra commas in there, Marianne. Great first verse, the 1st and 5th lines are beautiful. Not quite so taken by the rest, but - a moving antique orange is very fine.

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