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Anchor

                            The
                           dying
                           sailors
                           threw
                            the
                           anchor
                            over
                            the
                            ship.
                           They
                            had
                          chosen
                            their
                           graves,
                            to
                           dwell
                           with
                           their
                           cargo,
                           with
                            the
                            sea
                         monsters
                            and
                           souls
                            of
                                               Is                            sailors                              it?              
                                 this death as they know it or life as they owe

◄ Welcome to the city Pt 2

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Comments

darren thomas

Fri 22nd Aug 2008 08:18

It's an anchor, right? No, wait a minute. It's dead souls floating through the sea toward Davy Jones' locker.
Concrete poetry is usually set in its ways but this is great.

*Noticed your recent part 2 about the city but not had chance to really read and digest it Richard, due to boring revision and heaps of poetic apathy brought about by the former.
Keep writing though, I'm enjoying much of your work.

<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 21st Aug 2008 14:03

ps. Almost like a flat-line. x

<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 21st Aug 2008 14:01

Hi Richard,
Maybe it's the way they were meant to die?
Evokes great depth of thought and feelings. As if they're going into an abyss.


I thought at first, this was going to be the shape of a ship. If it's an anchor, raising the first two words and last two words of the bottom line would curve it.
Having said that, the "bottom line" is apt, for the sailors anyway. ( death being the bottom line.) :- )
Love Janet.xxx

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