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on porthcurnow beach

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Porthcurnow sand is made from shells

the sea is clear as air.

Granite rocks crouch crack-meshed

sparkling with embedded crystal.

 

We spent our first night here

in sleeping bags between two rocks

where we held hands.

 

Each time I woke

the stars had twirled around

creating a new picture.

At dawn I swam.

 

A tiny black leach attached itself

to my left breast.

Strange seas!

Strange seas!

 

On our way back to London

we lay on grass beside a Little Chef,

still holding hands.

And so our story began.

 

I sit on sand made up of shells

now you are ash

and I am dust.

A gentle tide comes in.

 

And in the ocean

bivalves gape

soon to be sand

between other toes than mine.

Strange seas

Strange seas!

 

 

 

28th Aug 2011

 

 

 

 

 

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 30th Aug 2011 21:19

Thanks Graham - re the weight of sentiment - I just don't want to go for the jugular where the sentiment is concerned. I don't want to be self-pitying. And also time moves on. But being back in a place that meant a lot, well, I HAD to write something didn't I? I was very interested in your comment by the way.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 29th Aug 2011 22:56

I love this and I dislike it too. There is such a weight of sentiment in the words but it feels so thinly woven. Did you mean this?
I loved what you were doing and the leanness of some of the narrative "At dawn I swam" but I so wanted more. You tease us all Ann, you're too secretive. how you've improved!

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 29th Aug 2011 19:42

Thank you. xx

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Tom Harding

Mon 29th Aug 2011 15:53

another great but sad poem. i like the simplicity of the verse working against the more lyrical 'strange seas!' a nice effect.

Philipos

Mon 29th Aug 2011 11:26

Don't know the place but thought the poem was great.

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Sun 28th Aug 2011 23:24

This holds such beautiful longing Ann,,wonderful stuff x

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Sun 28th Aug 2011 21:41

I love Porthcurnow Ann, like I love your poem.
I spouted a poem in the Minack once; the only response I got was from the strange seas.

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