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the dead done gone and did it again

 

the dead done gone and did it again
the dead done gone and shredded your heart
the dead will whistle their one refrain
the dead they tear your song apart

the dead done gone and shredded your heart
the dead paid the piper but forgot the tune
the dead they tear your song apart
the dead will be your playmates soon

the dead paid the piper but forgot the tune
the dead march on to a different drum
the dead will be your playmates soon
the dead enjoy vicarious fun

the dead march on to a different drum
the dead they freely waste your time
the dead enjoy vicarious fun
the dead done gone and ripped the rhyme

the dead they freely waste your time
the dead will whistle their one refrain
the dead done gone and ripped the rhyme
the dead done gone and did it again

◄ we have eaten them all

God Loves a Sinner ►

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John Coopey

Mon 22nd Aug 2011 23:11

Enjoyed this a lot Russell.
Not an obvious fusion - rap and pantoum, but no question that it works.
Difficult in such short lines to maintain the abab rhyming discipline.

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Russell Turner

Mon 22nd Aug 2011 14:13

Cheers guys.
Steve - it's a variation on a vilanelle called a pantoum: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pantoum.
It's a follow up to a piece I wrote called 'The Dead Start Fires' which I may post on here sometime.
Will check out your reccomendations.

<Deleted User> (8730)

Sun 21st Aug 2011 17:11

I like the repetition, I like the content, I hsve written many poems on death...

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