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Scorpion

You chuck de cheap shots, Gav,

are dem de best you 'ave?

I hear de same boo-hisses

when me pisses on de lav.

You say I cusp of misguided,

me I  jus' say lost

when shinin' up de lightin'

on me language torch

see you crawlin' your belly

in de hermit dust 

 

 

I gotta watch

 

 

I gotta watch

 

 

Dem is de big breaks, Gav,

like de real poets 'ave.

I not a proper poet

so me just down drag

mek a tight pack o' stuffin'

wi' no pregnant pause

til de bang full o' nuffin

frit de minotaurs

 

 

You gotta watch

 

 

You gotta watch

 

 

You gotta watch your back

no mek your shoulders roun';

de weight o' de manners

toss you up an' down.

Damn cheek call me chicken

when you hide in de ground

I put a sting on your tail

you lyin' lickle 'ound!

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Ray Miller

Thu 18th Aug 2011 13:13

Dave. My influences are Lager, Red Wine, Althia and Donna and Viagra.I think that's the correct order.
Seriously, poetry should be a big tent/broad church.T.S.Eliot's Waste Land is my favourite poem but I've no time for the likes of Andrew Motion who decry the influence of rap.

Neil/Laura. I've got a pet scorpion called Gavin.We don't always see eye to eye. My nickname for him is Sting, 'cos it's like he's in The Police, The Poetry Police, I mean. All stanzas, stropes and juxtapositional - typical scorpion.Doesn't like being called Sting. No like me talk like dat, man. Well, he can stick his villanelles up his caesura for all I care.

Tom. You sound like a Spaghetti West Indian.

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Thu 18th Aug 2011 11:49

De docter sez I izz impotent dats why I dress impotent.
Brilliant Ray.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 18th Aug 2011 10:20

Reminds me of Benjamin Zephaniah's stuff. Is this connected to the 'debates' over the use of patois by white kids?

Did you SEE David Starkey on Newsnight?! I've given myself a permanent look of stunned disbelief watching that!!

Dunno who Gav is? Gavin McInnes?

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Neil Fawcett

Thu 18th Aug 2011 10:04

Interesting. Like the colloquial, although difficult to get a handle on it. Is it about the downtrodden lashing out little stings frightening Minotaurs? Maybe an unusual take on the recent disturbances? Very accomplished, is da stuff of da proper poet, innit.

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Dave Bradley

Thu 18th Aug 2011 09:02

Extraordinary. Can't recall anything on WOL anything like it. Amazing. If it isn't too pedestrian a question, Ray - what are your influences?

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