Blameless
She didn't tell
She didn't know
She was just a child
A child lost
in a grown up world
Confused
Accepting.
She couldn't tell.
She couldn't know.
She was just a child.
A child not guilty.
Can't be blamed
Can't be shamed.
I was just a child.
Comments
Powerful message through deceptively simple language. XX
Thank you Cynthia.
I doubt she wants to make the poem 'hers', Rodney. I think that is the point.
No about anything in particular. Perhaps some concrete examples from your life might help to make the poem yours.
Agree with Francine here - proper hits home with that last line. Love the childlike simplicity to this poem - simple, but heartbreaking.
Got your message re socialising - no worries chuck, if you ever do though, give us a shout :)
Take care x
I really think your poems are getting better and better.x
You make a powerful impact with how you have gone from the third person to the first at the end.
The children are blameless. The greatest tragedy is that they can't see this at the time when it really counts.
<Deleted User> (8730)
Mon 6th Jun 2011 15:17
I just read it again. Still poigniant.
excellent, kath.. your style really is coming on here - i was haunted by this totally.. x
<Deleted User> (8730)
Mon 6th Jun 2011 09:46
poigniant
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kath hewitt
Fri 10th Jun 2011 22:41
Thank you to everyone for your comments. As always, they are very much appreciated.