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Remember how you cried one time,

The story’d made you sad

But there on hand to dry your eyes

Was always mum and dad.

 

Or when a wheel fell off your pram

Or dolly’s head would bend,

These were problems in your life

That Dad could always mend.

 

But now that you are 21

These skills have passed me by

I find I can no longer fix

The things that make you cry.

◄ Edward 11

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Shirley Smothers

Tue 20th Sep 2011 19:09

Again nice and touching poem.
I myself haven't the courage to record my own poems. I have a slight southern(American) accent.
And I think my voice is dull.
Very good writing.

Shirley

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 7th Mar 2011 13:19

I love this. And of course, so true!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:19

I, also, know exactly what you are saying. And it goes well past twenty-one. Very well expressed. Small point: change 'was' to 'were' since you are referring to two persons. Or - change 'and' to 'or'.... either way.

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Lynn Dye

Sat 5th Mar 2011 11:07

How lovely, John, sad but true, agree with Dave's comments about this being effective in its simplicity. x

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Dave Bradley

Sat 5th Mar 2011 08:41

So true, John. Deceptively simple yet very effective in its simplicity.

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