like paper

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In a dream

I took your hand.

It felt like paper.

 

You tried to hide it

in your pocket.

But I pursued it.

 

Then you moved away.

 

 

 

Love lost

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Banksy

Fri 28th Jan 2011 09:32

Ann- nothing wrong with a Quickie every now & then ;)

Janet Ramsden

Thu 27th Jan 2011 11:03

I love the intrigue this portrays for me. Nice one Ann :-)

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Elaine Booth

Wed 26th Jan 2011 20:11

Liking your minimal phase very much, Ann. This is wonderful - it could be interpreted as what was written on the hand reveals the true heart. x

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th Jan 2011 17:02

Oh I've got writer's block Graham - only minimal stuff at the moment. Sorry!

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 26th Jan 2011 16:58

This feels unfinished to me Ann. As the other comments suggest. You could either add your conjecture about the dream or put it into the dream.
The content didn't grip me enough to wonder what the dream was about.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Wed 26th Jan 2011 15:56

i was realy touched by this. lovely. xx

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Rachel Bond

Wed 26th Jan 2011 15:38

wow ann, believe or not whilst you were dreaming I wrote a poem called 'paper man' and never finished it. it was all descriptions of skin as paper and the person being without substance...fancy that!

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th Jan 2011 14:42

Not brittle, just elusive! Thanks for the comment Janet.

Janet s Brown

Wed 26th Jan 2011 14:31

Oooh and I like the picture you put with the poem too :)

Janet s Brown

Wed 26th Jan 2011 14:30

Im not the best on the meanings of poems but is it talking of a brittle love?, In any case I really enjoyed reading it , one of my faves, really interesting use of phrases and I think its shortness makes the words feel stronger :-)

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th Jan 2011 14:03

Thanks guys. It was just a quickie based on a dream I had last night!

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Andy N

Wed 26th Jan 2011 13:37

short and certainly not sweet but was really really touched by it.. top stuff, ann - loved it x

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Jules Clare

Wed 26th Jan 2011 12:09

Leaves me wondering what was on the paper

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