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Electricity

Last month's poem of the month writer, Carol Thistlethwaite, has chosen this month's poem. Carol says, "I enjoy the linked flow of ideas and images. They don’t impose on readers but invite them to create their own ‘story’ or whatever."

Find out more about Pam and her work at http://www.writeoutloud.net/poets/pamthompson

Electricity


I remember the house,

remember its breath,


its surfaces bleached,

turning lighter by day


yet scarred by a network

of knives, by your nails,


pale, which now scrape

at frost, score notches


on the windows of your car,

clutch at the static


which bristles between us like fur.


Remember how traffic-lights

dimmed then went out,


how your body was so brave,

there, inside its walk,


the long walk where slugs

had been, the slow weave


over intersections of weeds,

back to the house, to the shell

of your body,


to the shell of its shadow,

where our material things buzz


and where, if the noise

only dies, we are about


to re-discover electricity.


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Pam Thompson

Mon 1st Sep 2008 22:04

Thanks everyone, I really appreciate your comments here...am a little late on catching up with my own poem! Pamx

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Fri 29th Aug 2008 21:10

Hi Pam, I love this - it has a cracking juxtaposition of the man-made and nature.

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Mon 11th Aug 2008 17:10

Great poem, simple yet effective imagery, and a fantastic last image.

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Stuart A Paterson

Sat 9th Aug 2008 14:45

I like it Pam. It flows & bristles. Nice work IMO.

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