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weed seeds on a cumtissue

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i

god's cunt hovers between
the overcast and the catseye sky
dripping droplets of damnation
burning through our backeyes

ii

profane propaganda
highlighted by domino streetbulbs
gritbeacons of artifice
an overrated spectacle
the leafs only friend
selling chlorophyll for colour

iii

jittering joints adjust to the majesty
of steadfast automation
clutching to the amber trafficlight
we are pulled under tyres
an imprint of our faces fading

iv

we bathe in vivid impurities
the burned books of the past
scorched ash reigns
fluttering feathers
like a lovetonic cataclysm

◄ autumn evening journey

slithering sediment ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 6th Dec 2010 20:26

This is terrific. Glad to know your God 'idea' is a woman! I do need more readings to appreciate greater depth and craftsmanship, but my 'reception' is one of fulsome allusions that I need to forage through for myself. Outstanding images among many; 'catseye sky', 'selling chlorophyll for colour', 'the burned books of the past' etc.

Sorry I missed 'autumn evening journey'.

<Deleted User> (8657)

Sun 5th Dec 2010 16:57

No im all for overthrowing theology and I think that is what your intention was with this. It achieves it pretty well.

The choice to not include punctuation is always interesting to me as I feel there is always a reason for leaving it out. Not so much in performance but when I read it on the page i wonder why the poet made that choice.

I do feel the title is a little too shocking compared to the content.

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