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Letting-Go

Last month's poem of the month writer, Sally Jenkinson, has chosen this month's poem. Sally says, "It feels pretty ridiculous for little me to be trying to decide which poem of a lot of brilliant poems is the brilliant-est, so I just picked the one I genuinely like best! Find out more about Helen and her work at http://writeoutloud.net/poets/helenshay LETTING-GO She doesn’t cling anymore. That sweaty, grimy, too-young-to-have-a-wrist fist, that clenched its red need - staining into my arm – has loosened. Instead, a cooler hand touches mine. Still the dirt of play beneath those nails, but they ae painted each a different colour, by fingers, eager to experiment with bottles and jars. (MY bottles and jars). Soon that hand will let go. She’ll have her own varnish, and shall silver each full-grown nail with brush strokes, sluicing with sparkle. Then she’ll fleck her fingers out to dry - like a wave goodbye.

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<Deleted User> (4725)

Thu 17th Apr 2008 00:20

This is a very simple poem, and a very beautiful one. The subject is small, and is almost a snapshot, and the open structure allows it to be expanded. Very nice indeed.

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Julian (Admin)

Wed 16th Apr 2008 06:57

I agree with George: simple, perfect.
The writer's implied sadness touches me as I read: doesn't cling any more; cooler hand; she'll have her own varnish...
all point to the writer's anticipation of, what? rejection, increase in loneliness with the increase in her child's independence.
The wave goodbye is a wonderful touch, great imagery. raw, honest, well crafted and - sorry Tomás - better for not rhyming. I say this because I feel the raw honesty would be lost if Helen had tried to force it to rhyme.
This poem could not be 'better'; it just is.
Lovely choice, Sally.

<Deleted User> (4597)

Fri 4th Apr 2008 21:44

A nice poem, well constructed.
The rhyme comment from Tomas seems to miss the effectiveness of the final couplet. Not all poems have to rhyme.
All the time.

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Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Fri 4th Apr 2008 19:51

I enjoyed it as a read, though it would have been better had it rhymed.

George Chopping

Thu 3rd Apr 2008 20:25

That poem is superbly beautiful. Simple, perfect and reminds me of my youngest sister, at five years old, flick drying her fingers (as she had seen Mum do) on an occasion when she had been allowed to use some nail varnish!

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Val Cook

Tue 1st Apr 2008 17:57

Good choice, Sally. I will go and read more of Helens work.

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