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Song of triumph

When I wake on winter mornings

and the central heating's failed,

I ignore the alarm's warning

until my bladder has prevailed.

Then I take my fur lined slippers

and I don my fleecy jumper,

run to where the air is crisper,

touch the cold seat with a whimper.

 

When the thermostat is working,

and the outlet pipes have thawed,

another problem must be lurking

through the airing cupboard doors.

So I grab my handy flashlight,

kneeling slowly on bathroom floor,

where the pressure guage is in sight,

needle indicating flaw.

 

Undeterred I reach towards it,

grasping valve with firm cold fingers,

and I turn the plastic widgeet

until the central heating triggers.

Then I head to work with wonder,

this woman conquers all she sees,

never will accept surrender,

never will accept defeat.

◄ Nicolas

42nd Noel ►

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winston plowes

Sat 27th Nov 2010 18:01

My morning routine tomorrow will be get up. saw wood (a good activity to keep warm), stoke boiler , put on wood. eat breakfast :-) This is my kind of poetry topic Alison. I am keen on prose but also on something like this when it's done well and fits together (As this does) Well Done Win x

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John Coopey

Sat 27th Nov 2010 17:51

Excellent A. I can enjoy free verse but, for me, rhythm is the essence of poetry. If this was your first attempt at trochaics then I'm impressed. I usually struggle with assembling enough double syllables for the end hero words. Also I find abab rhyming patterns very testing.
Really enjoyed it. Post more.

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Sat 27th Nov 2010 17:39

This was my first try at trochaic rhythm - I've been reading Song of Hiawatha and am all inspired.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 27th Nov 2010 14:04

Oh god Alison - I think I'd have just burst into tears! You are indeed WonderWoman! x

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Greg Freeman

Sat 27th Nov 2010 11:58

It's funny how these new boilers need more TLC than the old ones. As a bloke with few DIY skills I can relate to your sense of triumph. Heat is one of the keys to happiness: thanks for this spirited and cheering winter warmer!

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