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Inner Space

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A seventy kilo person

is seven billion trillion atoms.

That's all, so they say.

Or is it?

What is an atom?

An atom is a nucleus

surrounded by electrons.

The atom's nucleus is a speck,

one millionth of a billionth

of its volume.

Less than a flea in a cathedral,

or an ant in a stadium,

Atoms are nothing,

they are empty, empty, empty,

we are – truly – hollow men,

whose illusory solidity is a gossamer matrix

containing mind-bogglingly vast, vacant space,

immense caverns, beyond imagining.

Inflated balloons are substantial

by comparison

 

With this emptiness within,

why do we not fall part?

Why do we miraculously hold together?

The reason?

Electrons have charges labeled`

‘negative’.

They ensure we cannot pass through each other

like ghosts, 

 

How dull. I pass through you

with my mind, but more would be fun, would be

‘positive’

 

What then of spirit?

Why should there be a tie from I

to such flimsy, unlikely vehicles?

When I die,

my atoms will take their enormous spaces off,

looking for new company.

Good luck to them,

I hope to be busy elsewhere.

 

 

The illustration is a standard school textbook image of the atom. It is so extremely wrong in terms of scale, that words fail.  

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◄ The upsetting effect of my current poem ending up in bits all over the laundry

Rebuilding the Tower of Babel? ►

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Dave Carr

Tue 16th Nov 2010 22:20

Excellent. I like the feeling of void and blankness. It also reminded me of a bit in the Hitch Hikers' Guide to the Galaxy (one of my favourite books) where the perspective vastness of the universe is mind blowingly demonstrated by comparing it to a piece of fairy cake. I think the naf atom is Helium. (I'm sure you know that) Dave

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Tue 16th Nov 2010 22:01

Oh, Dave, Dave ! didn't you just love Isobel's last sentence ?..."the very positive note you end on". She puts such an interesting "spin" on your musings. Now - if you could choose to be any subatomic particle at all, what would you be ?? I venture that you'd choose a strange-flavoured quark; me, I'd go for cheese 'n Onion - but no surprise there then :)

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Laura Taylor

Tue 16th Nov 2010 11:47

Oh this is excellent Dave! I LOVE the questions asked, the massive amount of information contained within, and the nicely located entrance of a more theological slant. I really like this:

How dull. I pass through you

with my mind, but more would be fun, would be

‘positive’

Your disclaimer about the pic made me laugh too :D

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Elaine Booth

Mon 15th Nov 2010 20:18

I like the thoughfulness and ideas of this poem, referencing Elliot and Coleridge too - nice one.

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John Aikman

Mon 15th Nov 2010 19:39

I remember sometime around 1970 being asked at school to write a story about what it would be like to be the size of an electron...and some girl in the class got a 'merit', 10 out of ten for a complete load of crap about being able to see people as giants and chairs seeming huge...and I'd written about being in a black void where nothing was visible in any direction and how matter was indivisible from time and space...and I got 3 out of ten for just turning up.

It literally changed my life...I gave up on any teacher actually being able to say anything sensible to me for years..it turned me against the system....because that teacher was just so stupid! (and she didn't like my essay).

Sad innit?

: (

Jxxx

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Isobel

Mon 15th Nov 2010 19:20

Your poem reminds me of how I never could get to grips with anything scientific.

I like the thoughtfulness of this though Dave and the very positive note you end on. x

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