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I cross a moor where stars are white.

I cross a moor where stars are white.

I match the swiftest swallows flight

Over a wide, a windy plain.

My feathered feet return again.

 

I seek the silence after day,

I sink in shadow, purple gray.

Above I hear the raucous storm

I burrow deep, alert but warm.

 

I stray through ever moving shades

My dreams are drawn in misty glades

I scramble down long screes of cloud

And wrap my fear in fine-spun shroud..

 

I walk with specters, shun the light

Who calls me from the realm of night?

◄ Antique Zealot

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Lynn Dye

Sat 20th Nov 2010 12:34

I really enjoyed this poem, Freda.

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Elaine Booth

Mon 15th Nov 2010 17:18

Yet I guess the point is we use phrases that are sometimes a bit well worn because they work. This poem felt comforting, familiar but yet not completely so because it has your voice, Freda.

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Freda Davis

Sun 14th Nov 2010 23:41

I think Cynthia is right, that there are some fairly cliched phrases here. Thank you for all the comments. I like it for the slightly ghostly voice of it, Myself.

<Deleted User> (7164)

Sun 14th Nov 2010 13:35

Lovely Freda. Fantastic imagery going on here.
'I scramble down long screes of cloud
and wrap my fear in fine spun shroud.
Super lines.x

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 14th Nov 2010 13:00

Good afternoon Freda-this poem has a very angelical feel to it-beautiful-thank you-

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 14th Nov 2010 12:28

I love the title Freda. The whole thing has a hymn like quality for me.

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Isobel

Sun 14th Nov 2010 12:25

It is lovely to see someone embracing rhyme though Freda. It gives a lovely flow to the poem which echoes the bird in flight, I feel.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 14th Nov 2010 12:11

I think this poem has a good feel, with some lovely phrases, but I also feel that it limps into some very average language and imagery, like a kite not quite lifted up, struggling for the upper drafts.

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Greg Freeman

Sun 14th Nov 2010 11:47

Very Emily Bronteish this, for me, Freda. I was there on the moors above Haworth. Enjoyed it.

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