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Elusive

Sloth and Righteousness argued in the street,

Common Sense told them to button it.

Freedom sat on the fence.

 

Sloth slunk off,

Righteousness argued the point,

Common Sense felt weary,

Freedom sat on the fence.

 

The sun came out to play,

Righteousness slipped into shade,

Common Sense went to prevail elsewhere.

Freedom sat on the fence.

 

Optimism and Heartache met in the street,

Optimism tried her very best,

But Heartache still suffered on.

Freedom sat on the fence.

 

Dreaminess blew kisses around.

Sobriety passed in disapproval,

But Dreaminess didn’t care.

Freedom sat on the fence.

 

A rain cloud passed across the sun,

Another came looking fiercer.

Soon now it would rain down, yet still…

Freedom sat on the fence…

Freedom

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Laura Taylor

Tue 26th Oct 2010 10:32

I really like this too - I can see Freedom being sat on the fence, as to me it says 'holding mutually contradictory opinions'. This approach gains one no friends in life heh, but does give the individual freedom to believe in whatever the hell they want - to see both sides and to agree with both sides on differing points.

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Lynn Dye

Sun 24th Oct 2010 11:50

Thank you very much to all for kind comments.
Isobel, I am sure you are right in all that you say. You have obviously thought much more deeply on the subject than I did writing it! ;) xx

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Isobel

Sat 23rd Oct 2010 20:31

This is an interesting one Lynn - very unusual thought processes. I feel like I want to replace freedom with the word 'peace'. Sometimes you have to fight for your liberty - you have to do battle to survive - to be alive. Peace for me isn't a strong option. Freedom is the ideal - the goal - perhaps it exists in an ivory tower - or a mirage - I would never see it sitting on a fence. I do like your poem though cos it has made me think and I love poetry that makes me think. x

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Noetic-fret!

Sat 23rd Oct 2010 19:11

This is a great poem Lynn, truly enjoyed it. Nice work if you dont mind me saying so.

stay well

mike

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 23rd Oct 2010 14:41

Hi Lynn - I really like this very much. I love "Dreaminess" blowing kisses around! And poor old Optimism trying to cheer up Heartache! Oh dear! If only silly old Freedom would get off the fence! xx

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Lynn Dye

Sat 23rd Oct 2010 12:40

Not too sure where this one came from!!

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